Personal+Freedoms+Essay

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** 9 ** Essays earning a score of 95-100 meet the criteria for a score of 8 and, in addition, are especially sophisticated in their argument, thorough in development, or impressive in their control of language. Essays earning a score of 8 **effectively** argue a clear stance regarding the limits of personal freedoms in a democratic society. The evidence and explanations used are appropriate and convincing, and the writer has used the source material masterfully, citing each one correctly. The prose demonstrates consistent ability to control a wide range of the elements of effective writing but is not necessarily flawless. **7** Essays earning a score of 7 meet the criteria for a score of 6 but provide a more complete explanation, more thorough development, better citation of sources, or a more mature prose style. Essays earning a score of 6 **adequately** argue a stance regarding the limits of personal freedoms in a democratic society, though it may not be fully developed. The evidence and explanations used are appropriate and sufficient. Sources are cited though perhaps not as effectively as they might be; citation formats are fairly accurate. The writing lapses in diction or syntax, but generally the prose is clear. Essays earning a score of 4 **inadequately** argue a stance regarding the limits of personal freedoms in a democratic society. The argument may be vague, or it may shift from the start of the essay to the end. The evidence or explanations used may be inappropriate, insufficient, or less convincing; source citations are very weak or lacking altogether. The prose generally conveys the student’s ideas but may be less consistent in controlling the elements of effective writing. Essays earning a score of 2 demonstrate **little success** in arguing a stance regarding the limits of personal freedoms in a democratic society. These essays may misunderstand the prompt or substitute a simpler task by responding to the prompt tangentially with unrelated, inaccurate, or inappropriate explanation. Source citations are incorrect or lacking. The prose often demonstrates consistent weaknesses in writing, such as grammatical problems, a lack of development or organization, or a lack of control. ** 1 ** Essays earning a score of 1 meet the criteria for a score of 2 but are underdeveloped, especially simplistic, or weak in their control of language.
 * Personal Freedom Essay Scoring Guide // (modeled after those of College Board) //**** : : **
 * 8 Effective **
 * 6 Adequate **
 * 5 ** Essays earning a 5 argue a stance regarding the limits of personal freedoms in a democratic society, though it may not be fully developed. The evidence or explanations used may be uneven, inconsistent, or limited, and source citations may also be weak or use incorrect form. The writing may contain lapses in diction or syntax, but it usually conveys the student’s ideas.
 * 4 Inadequate **
 * 3 ** Essays earning a score of 3 meet the criteria for a score of 4 but demonstrate less success in arguing a stance regarding the limits of personal freedoms in a democratic society. Use of sources is weak or lacking. The essays may also show less maturity in control of writing.
 * 2 Little Success **
 * 0 ** Indicates an on-topic response that receives no credit, such as one that merely repeats the prompt. ** --- ** Indicates a blank response or one that is completely off topic.

9 = 95-100 8 = 90-94 7 = 85-89 6 = 79-84 5 = 73-78 4 = 68-72 3 = 63-67 2 = 58-62 1 = 57 or below
 * Numeric Grade Equivalency**

Items to Annotate for/Confirm in your Essay: Frame (in the introduction, somewhere in the body, and the conclusion) Thesis (with a strong claim that takes a stance and owns it!!) Some form of emphasis (repetition or restatement that emphasizes something in your argument)

Body paragraphs (strong claims, well chosen and supportive evidence and convincing commentary) Antithesis

Across the paper: Use of ethos, pathos and logos Touch on your frame Repetition, restatement and parallel structure Improved diction

Conclusion: Generalize your thesis Touch on your frame PUSH THE ENVELOPE!

Works Cited

Barnes, Jonathan, Ed. //The Collected Works of Aristotle: The Revised Oxford Translation//. Princeton University Press: Princeton, New Jersey, Sixth Printing with corrections,1995. Berlin, Isaiah. “Two Concepts of Liberty.” New York University Professor Helen Nissenbaum project Web site. Oxford: Oxford University Press, 1969. July 18, 2010. < [] >.  “ DUI/DWI LAWS as of March 2004. “ OHS Health and Safety Services, Inc. March 26, 2004. OHS Occupational Health Services. July 18, 2010. <[].